Bernadette Braganza

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“Born in the USAAAA, Born in the USAAAA,” sang the 18-year-old on the mic, strumming his out of tune guitar. “Dikra*” said the old man as he got off the makeshift stage, “Why don’t you sing another song, maybe something Bollywood? My customers are not interested in listening that you were born in the USA while having their bun maska*. If you sing in this manner, my remaining few customers will run away.” “Don’t worry chacha* your customers won’t run away; I take feedback very seriously,” replied the teenager.

The next day…

“Born in the Bollywoooooooood.” The old man simply shook his head while collecting the next order.

*Meaning of some of the words:

Dikra- Boy or Son

Bun maska- Bun and butter (popular in many Irani Cafes)

Chacha- Uncle

The photo prompt is by Rochelle Wisoff-Fields at the Friday Fictioneers. The word prompt (manner) is by GirlieOnTheEdge at Six Sentence Stories.

Bernadette Braganza

June 28, 2018

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14 responses to “Feedback”

Nomadosauras

June 28, 2018 at 7:52 pm

Wow! This look’s like a musician’s blissful corner! 😀

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1. Nomadosauras
  
  June 28, 2018 at 7:53 pm
  
  *looks
  
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2. Bernadette Braganza
  
  June 28, 2018 at 8:38 pm
  
  It probably is
  
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UP

June 28, 2018 at 7:56 pm

Great job!

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1. Bernadette Braganza
  
  June 28, 2018 at 8:38 pm
  
  Thanks UP
  
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Clark Farley (@wakefielddoc)

June 29, 2018 at 1:43 am

what do they say about ‘necessity is the mother of invention’? lol

(hey, thanks for the glossary… one of the cool things about the blogosphere is how writers can be from literally anywhere on the planet. the slang, idioms and other expressions not only enhances a Six, it adds to my own vocabulary.)

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messymimi’s meanderings

June 29, 2018 at 2:34 am

Somehow i hear Chacha in my mind thinking “kids these days” in whatever idiom or language he would use for it. Well told!

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GirlieOnTheEdge

June 29, 2018 at 4:55 am

Cute Six Sentence. Made me smile. Common situation the world over. Old vs young and music.
The uncle’s frustration with the song, the boy not quite getting what his uncle was trying to tell him.
I don’t think that was quite the compromise the uncle was hoping for 😀

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Pat B

June 29, 2018 at 5:50 am

This is a cute and funny SSS. It made me laugh. I also appreciated the vocabulary lesson. I have not eaten at an Irani cafe, but if I do I’ll know what bun maska is. Thanks.

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granonine

June 30, 2018 at 2:14 am

Always interesting to learn new words, and yeah, the kid was being kind of dumb to sing about being born in America when he was NOT in America 🙂

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Keith’s Ramblings

June 30, 2018 at 1:16 pm

Good job he wasn’t born in ‘Al Jumahiriyah al Arabiyah al Libiyah ash Shabiyah al Ishtirakiyah al Uzma’!

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michaelwynnauthor

June 30, 2018 at 2:07 pm

Lovely twist at the end

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lisarey1990

July 1, 2018 at 4:42 am

Very fun piece.

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jillyfunnell

July 4, 2018 at 12:06 am

Enterprising boy! He will go places, I am sure. I loved the different expressions and appreciate the glossary. New words are always welcome. Thank you, Bernadette. And now I want a bun maska!

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